BigBadBear

That was good. :) I really don't know what to say. I'm not very good at critiquing lyrics. Well, grammaratically (is that a word?) there was one line that wasn't ...

Um... Well that was interesting. Not really what I was expecting, but it was cool. Lol, so I get the image that this dog is sick and they are trying ...

*squeals!* Yes, you posted! Ok, now I'll hunt for stuff: “Commander!” He shouted, “The culprit’s missing!” He doesn't need to be capitalized. The private yawned again. “Nope. Not since las

Well, I've never read a story quite like this one. It is totally original, and fun. The dialogue was complete natural, so great job on that. There was only one ...

Whoa...*shivers* That was really good! You really created a mysterious feeling come over us, which is a good thing. *shivers again* Creepy... Well, this was very well written. I like ...

Yes! About time that you posted! Ok, now let's get to the critique: "...Prinsoaldreahi," came a voice with more force If this is a word in another tongue, then this ...

Merry Christmas, Cat! Well, I am halfway done with reading this and I have noticed that you are sort of...lacking in inserting commas. I'll show a few examples: “Hey everybody!” ...

*points up* Kit got it all. Darn her... Ok, well this was really good. I couldn't really understand what it was talking about though...first you were talking about Santa, then ...

I'll Be Gone Well , you made me like a fool and I bet that you felt it

Well, I am going to crit this to death. So... I thought myself of being pretty, and in all truths I was. Insert 'of being' to make it flow smoother. ...

Inside a dark small room decorated lined with armories; two figures moved about slow and a semicolon is not the proper punctuation to use. A comma will be fine here. ...

Hey! Well, I am like loving this story to pieces, and so I might as well point out some stuff: Booker swore. He was getting a headache. The sooner this ...

Hey! Well, I've got this to say so far: Your prologue was highly interesting. It was well crafted and really lures the reader in. I think that it is interesting ...

...this was very...strange. I believed that you were an old man; and mind you, that wasn't very good, lol. I kinda got creeped out. I thought that this was going ...

Holy cow! Seriously, that was the best prologue I have even read; considering that I have read many prologues on this site. Let's get through the very un-numerous mistakes that ...