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[quote="Sonlen"] Your main problem are spelling errors, you spell recognize recognize, not recognise. You have the same problem with the word realize, you are replacing the Z's with S's. quote] ...

Aggh, I've noticed both this and chapter twenty but I haven't had time to review...>_> Got too much stuff on my plate...AcaDeca and upcoming finals, and studying for the SAT... ...

I highly doubt the laws of physics will undergo a complete revolution in a thousand and fifty years. They've worked for the past five billion or so, why change in ...

Okay, prepare for a long review, though I chose not to do the line-by-line treatment because it was so long. Maybe you could cut this into smaller parts? Because I ...

His words continued to fade. Everything was gone in an instant. Everything they fought for. \ I think there should be a "had" after the "they". Blood gushed out his ...

First to review (I hope; I'm a bit slow when it comes to reviewing)~ The bus pulled out from behind me and out of the school compound as I stared ...

First things first--I noticed plenty of punctuation errors. The most prominent one had to do with dialogue. Por ejemplo, this sentence: “sorry, I didn’t mean to hurt you. I haven’t ...

Prepare for nitpicky line-by-line-ness (well, as much as I can do before I take a shower). There was silence in the car. This sentence is a tad awkward: "there was" ...

Prepare for a very nitpicky line-by-line review. >_> Sorry, I really don't know how to review any other way. Quite honestly, it deserved the rest The "quite honestly" is superfluous ...

This is a fascinating idea; I'll be the first to say that. In particular, I love your first paragraph. I love how it unapologetically drags us straight into the universe, ...

Sorry for the kinda-late review...and the worst thing is, I wasn't even that busy. >_> I just...didn't feel much like reviewing until now. There were only six board members present, ...

Cool! You made a new one *coughfinallycough*! Er, ignore the last part. Work at your own pace, you know... Here comes a review filled with tiny nitpicks. Sorry. >_> A ...

I'll do what I've never done before with this story and do a line-by-line. :( Sorry, but...I find it MUCH easier to do it this way. That way I don't ...

Hmm, seems intriguing. Do you happen to have a fondness for dictionary defintions? Anyway, prepare for a truly MONSTROUS review. I like to go line-by-line and theeeen write a general ...

I'd critique this, but everyone else has already made their points and I agree completely (particularly when it comes to names...) That being said, I have one thing to say ...