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Hi, blackpencil, I'll be your reviewer for today. Be warned that I get very nitpicky with my reviews; I'm not being harsh, just trying to help you produce the best ...

Hello, I'll be your reviewer for today. :) Be warned, I'm rather...nitpicky. The soft melody of the music box echoed and faded through the dimly lit room. "Echoed" and "faded" ...

In junior high, I read Ender's Game and loved it. Several years later, I went back to the book and realized it wasn't half as good as I thought it ...

I'll be your reviewer for today. :) Mountains will blind in the heat of centuries. Oceans will chaos with the blood of the earth. I think there should be a ...

Here's the promised review! I trembled with rage, causing strands of my long blonde hair to fall into my face. This is a rather awkward sentence; I don't quite like ...

Hi, Elentari; I'll be your reviewer for today. :) Steon walked up to the hangman’s noose. I'm not terribly fond of the phrase "walked up"; it feels a bit weak ...

“My, my, you really need to learn some respect for your elders. This is becoming ridiculous. For one thing, stand up straight and look me in the eye, please. All ...

Wow...just... I knew even when I first read chapter sixteen, before reading the rest of the story, that there would be no conceivable way of saving Koreth (don't ask me ...

I'm on a roll, here! Seriously; it's good that I'm getting through these so fast--it means I wasn't so bogged down by errors and/or idiocies in your story that I ...

Wow...ummm... I liked this chapter as a character moment, especially for Emma--it's a very introspective piece and it definitely shows how much she's grown, how she's decided to finally accept ...

I'm not going to do the line-by-line thing because your prose is by and far fine (your most major problems being ones I've already addressed--the misuse of commas and talking ...

SHOCKER!!! I'm back--and I'm reviewing this! I know, I know I'm hideously late, but I promise that I will force my way through every chapter I missed and tear them ...

Er...I'd advise you not to call the story "Time Lord", as that name has already been taken by the great British science fiction show "Doctor Who"... Also, I'd read it, ...

Hi, Ghost (can I just call you that?)! Welcome to YWS. A few things--first of all, I notice you haven't reviewed anyone else's works here yet. The general rule here ...

If the reader is confused by any point in the story and you have to explain in a subsequent post what the point actually meant, then I'd say it's time ...