Bhayden71297

Hey there!!! I'm Brie, and I'm here to tell you about how great this piece was!!!;) I love the description you use through out this piece- I can close my ...

Hey there, I'm Brie:) Welcome to YWS! Okay, first off, I want to tell you how amazing this idea is. You're telling a story that many people can relate to. ...

This has a great idea to it and structure. The words you use definitely tell a vivid story. You definitely have a lot to work with here. It has really ...

Wow. This poem was amazing. At first, I was doubting the structure of the poem. But, then I started to read it, and by the end, that doubt was gone. ...

This was really, really amazing to read. I'm glad I clicked on it. I myself have hurt myself in many ways I regret. The whole poem is so blunt and ...

Hey there!:) I really felt the pain and suffering of the girl. You described exactly everything she went through. It was deep and the reason it hit me so hard, ...

This was so far good! Great plot, and actually a little sad and touching. You managed to stick some emotion in there, just enough to feel like you were living ...

Hey- Wow. W.O.W.That's all I have to say. Just...wow. I don't even know if there's anything to correct here. Its...amazing. I could really relate to it. Told my whole life ...

Hey there! :) Great basic plot of the story. It's sad, depressing and just plain sweet. Kinda like Shakespeare and his tragedies :p Even though they're sweet, they're still sad. ...

Hey! :) I need help believing, That you are on my side. That you are not going to hurt me, Too many times I’ve cried. Okay so I like the ...

This was absolutely beautiful! You've captured emotion and spread it our nicely for all us to see and experience. Great job! For a a person that's "not a poet" you ...

I love the concept of this piec. More over I love the piece! It was amazingly written and just beautiful. I felt as if i were hte one writing that ...

Hey! Long time no talk huh? ;p Just as I said, I stopped on by. And by the looks of it....i have almost nothing to correct! Amazing peace. Brilliant. Well ...

I like this a lot! Great job! A suggestion though: Your second paragraph where you begin the letter is a little...choppy. Your punctuation is something that could be differently arranged. ...

You have quite a few errors hear with grammar. Only withe the letter "i" though. I knew it was a dream A mere fairytale But still it seemed Like if ...