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Re: Ella
Hi there, This is quite a lovely opening and I enjoyed reading it. Just a couple of points really. First of all, it would be better to have dialogue in ...
Sep 30, 2015 -
Re: Bestfriends..
Hi there, This is a good start :) it has what I like in a story which is a little suspense at the very beginning. It doesn't dive right into ...
Sep 30, 2015 -
Re: In A Heartbat
Hi there! Just a few notes for you. First of all, I noticed that when using the word "you're" you are spelling it "your'e" Also in relation to that, it ...
Sep 30, 2015 -
Re: More Than What it Seems. Chapter 1
Hi there! I enjoyed the opening to this, it jumps straight into the story which I like. I think it sounds great in first person, so no need to change ...
Sep 30, 2015 -
Re: Hidden: Chapter One
Hi there! Your story has the potential to be quite interesting however I do think that the first chapter is a little confusing. The writing style is good but I ...
Sep 30, 2015