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It would be impossible to explain my relationship with Ella Harley. She was an English nerd with a knack for my Grandmother’s crime novels, and I was a techno geek who dreamed of becoming a filmmaker. We both had a witty sense of humor and dreams too big for our own good, and it was glorious. I had a feeling that I was the only one she let read her writing, and she was definitely the only one I let read mine. I was always pushing her to make it more public, and she in return would say, “When you do the same with yours, maybe,” which was the equivalent of, “Yeah, when pigs fly, moron.” Now that I think about it, what we had wasn’t exactly what I’d even call a relationship, it was more of an advanced affiliation. I think she was scared of messing up with me. She never was a risk taker outside of her writing. But I know she caught me looking at her in class, and I think I felt her eyes on me sometimes in Calculus. Never English, her eyes were always glued in English, her heart always set. I remember how much she enjoyed the Latin, explaining it as an advanced jigsaw where pieces came together to make a big picture, but where every piece wasn’t specific to a certain one. Her favorite word was magnanimous, because it meant literally (she stressed the literally.) full of great soul. After a time it was my favorite word as well, for it was the only one which completely captured what the word Ella meant to me.
Ohh..kay, certainly a very interesting little paragraph there. Not sure if this is perhaps meant to be a prologue of sorts or just exactly what this is, but, as a sort of introduction to this character Ella, and the relationship that the narrator here and said character here is definitely pulled off pretty neatly in this one.
The description of these two personalities is really done quite well here, you certainly go into sort of the things that they share in common, but you can see even as the two mesh together, they are also two very different people. You've certainly done a wonderful job creating two characters that seem to be very suited to each other but still with very easily distinguishable personalities there. Well, and then of course to add that there's that wholesome ending there with the Latin word. And ahh, its just one of those extremely sweet moments that leave you just with only the ability to say Awww.....and ahh, I really love the way that you ended this little paragraph here.
So, well there's that, the fact that the whole thing is one chunky paragraph is a bit of an issue but, just a simple bit of splitting this up, especially at the bit of dialogue there would easily solve that and this is just a really wholesome piece of writing here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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