BenGrange

Let me just add one more thing while I'm still here. Sometimes it is confusing to have two characters whose names begin with the same letter, especially if those two ...

Okay, here's an honest edit of your chapter. I'm going to put a lot of phrases here from above, and let you know what I think you can do to ...

As a prologue, I can see this in an actual book. What I'm picturing right now *A graphic of several newspaper clippings, dated as those above, with the happenings written ...

Hey Black. I've got a lot of insight for this chapter, and I hope you're ready for it. You remember the comments about the run on sentences in your last ...

One thing I love about prologues is when they are told in narrative, as if someone were telling a bedtime story. One thing that might heighten the energy of the ...

Hi, Thanks for the review on my book! I'm glad you liked it. Are you planning on writing more to this? It's a good set up, so there are infinite ...

Hey, I'm going to add a bit more to this comment, so you can skip to the bottom to read it if you want. I'm going to be critical, but ...

Hey, I just wanted to give you a bit more advice, not on this chapter in specific, but in general. It can be applied to this chapter, as well as ...