BellaRoma

Okay. I'll see you next chapter.

Wow. This is GOOD! Let me know if you decide to post more.

Sounds pretty good. It sounds like it will all come together.

Thanks for the review. I've made some of the changes you suggested. This is going to be a lot better than before. All the changes I missed are getting pointed ...

Clever! *applauds*

Thanks, you helped me pick out a few that I missed. I hope you're less confused now you're reading them in order.

There are 5 parts up and I have character profiles on my blog . Come back whenever you want.

Thank you for reviewing. What about Mercy? Did this affect your impression of her?

Surely passive voice works there as Mercy isn't the one walking? My only query. Thanks, I've definitely improved since joining.

Okay, I got around to this too. I got most of the errors. Now I'm happy with my work.

Okay, so I have gone over this and edited it a bit. Is it better now?

This is part 3 of the 5 I have up. You said you wanted to know more...

Hey! Part 5 has been officially published. Also my blog may interest you. Leave a comment or any questions.

I'm guessing that it is, or you wouldn't have called it that. Like I say, I'm curious as to what they've been chosen for.

Part 5 is officially up. From Mercy's POV as promised. I SO want to introduce my other important character in this novel, Sara. The only problem - she doesn't live ...