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  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Watched - Prologue

    Hi Sofie! (Can I call you that?) Wow, I'm surprised this is the first review I've given you after you've given me all those nice reviews! Shame on me. Woah, ...

    Apr 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: deleted

    Hi Lele! I liked it! It was almost like a song, from a Disney movie. Like, "I need to get out of here!". Haha. I'm tired of the same old ...

    Apr 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Scream

    Hello Rune :) I surprisingly realy liked this poem. And it is surprising because usually I am annoyed by these so-called "emo" poems because they seem, to me at least, ...

    Apr 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: A Broken Dream

    Hi again Dante :D To commence, I'd like to say that I really enjoyed this poem. It was well written, descriptive, and conveyed imagery and provoked thoughts quite well. Just ...

    Apr 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Cleaning Us Up

    Hello Primordiality! I actually liked this poem! It was really well portrayed and written. It's a bit strange to read, especially the ending. But I don't doubt you were going ...

    Mar 29, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Daddy's Little Plaything

    Woah!! That was certainly interesting. I wish you'd go into more depth- though, continue it, maybe? You have an entire novel etched out here, and then it just-ends! It's really ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: A Colt .45

    Hello :D First off, this is a very emotional poem, and it written quite well. A few things though: Gradually mixes with tears streaming, There really doesn't need to be ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Untitled

    Hello! I liked it. It was sweet and sincere yet had a dark undertone. I love that you give just the slightest glimpse of anger and deception. One thing is ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: A Simple Black Dress

    Hi Jas :D They became good friends She wore a white shirt He sad he was going to war I think you meant 'said'. He promised he wouldn't get hurt ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: No. 13

    Forgive me if I'm just being ignorant, but to me this just seems like a bunch of words put together without much meaning called a poem. You have way, way ...

    Mar 27, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: What Remains in my Memory

    Wow! *Depressed Now* Okay, first off I'm going to give you my spelling, grammar, etc. critiques. Things I add will be in red . Things you should take out will ...

    Mar 26, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The Fall

    Hi Nightshade! Review time :D First off, I like it! It excels in conveying imagery which, in my opinion, is the most important part of poems like this. However, it ...

    Mar 25, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Brain Demon

    Hi Vee! I love this :) To describe something as mundane as a headache in so many words and with so much creativity is marvelous. (Yes, marvelous.) Good job! I ...

    Mar 25, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: The Voice In My Head

    Hi Ranger! “No matter that!” it said cheerfully. “Just hang yourself from a nearby tree.” These two lines don't rhyme as well as the others. . .try finding something to ...

    Mar 23, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: My Stupid Teenage Essence

    I loved this! The entire poem is beautifully written, and your convey your emotions perfectly. I can REALLY relate to it too. It shows many different emotions and thoughts in ...

    Mar 22, 2011


I was promis'd on a time, To have a reason for my rhyme: From that time unto this season, I receiv'd nor rhyme nor reason.
— Edmund Spenser