BarrettBenedict

i actually really like the last line of the poem. it is my favorite part. I think maybe if you put more plant imagry in it could definately work. :lol: ...

Ok, changes made: him and his family had been left to claw at the open windows He and his family had been left to claw at the open windows It ...

:D :lol: :D You can't imagine the relief I feel in seeing that you got this one. I was under the suspicion that nobody would dig it. More to come ...

I like it, yet it reminds me more of fantasy than sci-fi. My only advice on continuing this would be to really flesh out the visuals in it. This has ...

Epic \m/ :) I'll write the guitar. We just need a drummer and another guitar player. (Nobody listens to the bass in death metal).

Meaning lost; seems to be a common thread. But I won't hold it against you, because you have a cat with a chicken head as your avatar. And that is ...

Hey, thanks for your time and effort. I'll get on those tweaks in a bit. This one is close to my heart as it is the long awaited rewrite of ...

No biggie, I appreciate the Hitchhiker's Guide comparison. I get that a lot. Probably because I love absuridty and imagination, and it usually takes the form of science fiction, because ...

Honor is a simple matter. Everyone is born knowing what is honorable. If everybody acted honorably then no one would die needlessly. Those who pretend to not know what honor ...

Yeah, I'm sorry about that actually, that's why I added the :lol: to try to convey the fact that basically everything I say is in good humor. I really do ...

Your critique was most helpful, but it didn't make me chuckle nearly as much as your righteous indignation at my quips. You don't have to be so serious, I'm seriously ...

It is brilliant, I don't know what poem you're reading :lol: Trust me, I know the importance of an ending, read the last two lines again, ponder them if you ...

Exactly, Nate. It's all bottom layer, as I said in the notes with the whole "my subconscious vomited this" bit. It's mostly an exercise in words that sound awesome together. ...

Why, thank you. Just for that, and because I'm an arbitrary buffoon, have all of my points. :o

It has been my firm belief for many years now that the shedding of the ego is something that all people should strive towards. And let's see here, how to ...