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Really good. The idea does draw the reader in. Consider this sort of a general advice instead of a review. I am not an expert but I would say work ...

Thank you and I'd love to. With time I have realized that no poem is crap, nor should it be. It's an extension of your feelings, it can't be crap. ...

A very simple but interesting poem. I would suggest rewording it in a way that has all the sentence more or less of the same length but that is just ...

Thank you. I am glad that you found it interesting. I took the advice you and the others gave me and did try to work a bit on proper punctuation. ...

No! My dear man, you misunderstand me. You, sir, have opened my eyes. I can see how your extensive experience and informed perspective is far superior and thus dwarfs mine. ...

In all honesty I consider your review as the best piece of writing I have come across. You clearly have taken upon yourself the duty of informing me that I ...

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Thank you. :) But I still think that punctuation is going to be the death of me.

Thank you. :)

Thank you. My biggest problem by far is punctuation, so far I've always been able to get away with it but I guess I'll have to just sit down and ...

WOW NICE Thank you :D Shrouded in silence,stands he still on the threshold of insanity. Shrouded in silence, stands he who knows not his fate. His own bane. Wraith now, ...

QUICK REPLY= I loved it, beautiful and intense images, you spelt "losing" as "loosing" once so check that, favourite line was definitely "But the vision shattered, its splinters stabbed his ...

wow this is very moving but I didn't get what it was about. I'm very confused on were he is and who he is and what's happening. I know poetry ...