Barbilo

Thank you Pretzesing for your review. It is really insightful and I guess I should edit 'the dead' part for sure. This is the whole chapter. It is a prologue ...

Yeah, this means I have to read the first chapter and review that too. Keep writing, everything gets better the more you write. :) Glad to help.

Thank you ooh4764 for your review. I actually thought I could get away with grammar when it comes to dialogue. Ooops. When referring to 'a dead' it refers to a ...

Yeah, the poem is full of emotion and what matters is getting out how you feel. The important thing is to make the reader feel the same way as they ...

Interesting opening scene. I love how the first chapter begins with action, which is a good thing to draw people in. On to chapter 2.

Most definitely. :) Yeah, take it down and protect its growth like a treasure. Oh thanks, I am nowhere close to being a veteran but I have completed a 100k ...

Thank you Chaima93. Glad you enjoyed it. ^_^

I think I've just adopted a new phrase to say aloud instead of cussing. ^_^ Thanks for explaining the meaning.

I suppose we all interpret things according to our experience or mood. Very well done since you are able to bring out so much emotion from a mundane experience as ...

Yeah, your work is very promising. I believe this group is for creative feedback, you can develop the story without having to showcase all your developments but it is really ...

Great poem PickledChrissy. This can actually be a war anthem. Interesting that I didn't really it was about Christ until the end. I suppose Christo Rey is coined from Christ. ...