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This is fabulous! The rhyme scheme and the pentameter work wonders on any poem, but this had a good subject to go with, as well as some beautiful descriptions. Really ...

First off I think this is a terrific poem. The characters have depth to them, there's movement, you start off in one place and end in another. Really good. I ...

There are some good specific images in the first and last stanzas. I think this would be more powerful if it were expanded with details about the people, particularly the ...

I liked the idea, but it was a little long. I actually didn't mind the repetition - it sort of reminded me of the poem "The Leader" by Roger McGough. ...

I loved this - it's really wonderful. The line about the mouth is great. I'd rework the title, so it doesn't give away the best line of the poem, and ...

I like the line Her feet are her Only friend. Much of the rest of the poem was unoriginal, but that line was quite nice. What you need here are ...

I agree. The single best way to become a better poet is to read more poetry. This was good, especially for a first poem. You have a really interesting idea ...

I love the way you describe things, like the boy, or the blood from his cut. (I think there may be a typo in that sentence though - did you ...

It works as a nonsense poem, though I was wondering what a 'nat' was? Oh, and 'ran' should be 'run' over... I guess I'm not really sure what to make ...

This is definitely getting somewhere, but it needs work. Read it aloud and get the rhythm you want, set up its structure, decide whether you want it to rhyme or ...

Definitely random. Careful on your syllable counts - there were a bunch of six-syllable lines in there (namely the first and fifth ones). I didn't mind them (they were, after ...

I liked these a lot, especially the first and the last ones, and the ink one. I was put off a bit by the second 'now' in the last one, ...

Punctuation would be nice here. It's ok (except for the smileys), but the single line words are weak and don't add much. I like the last line, but the rest ...

The first line and the last line are the only parts that really affected me. Try to spruce up the middle bits some more. Do you know that song, the ...

Can't help but notice you're posting a lot recently. That's fine, but just keep in mind that poetry belongs to a world that values quality over quantity. I'm not saying ...