Azila

WHat I think it needed was something more to clarify that this elephant was a toy. Oh, no! *politely disagrees* Part of what I love so much about this piece ...

I've come to review, like I promised I would! Nitpicks first.. Back in the days when ideas of ‘peace and love’ defied the social norm and challenged the conventional ways ...

I'm back, as per request! *bows* I'm delighted to say that this piece makes a lot more sense now that you've edited it. It shouldn't be in Non-Fiction, (I recommend ...

And in Canada, pyjamas is spelled with the Y. :oops: Sorry, I hadn't realized. ~Azila~

Thank you sosososo much. Sorry, I tend to abuse commas a lot, they're always there when they're not needed and then they disappear from where they should be... Also sorry ...

No, I didn't mean to yell at you! I was just... surprised? I guess it's not what I was expecting and therefore caught me off guard. I think it is ...

It's better now. However, this date... was just going to say that this day was special (which it is). Thanks for your opinion! But you go on to say that ...

Thanks you all so much for your awesome crits! I haven't had time to edit this yet, but hopefully I will get one later in the week. Thanks again! ~Azila~

Hm... I kind of get the feeling she doesn't have to try. :P ~Azila~

Thanks to you both! [Seems like a waste of good coffee. :p] Lol! This is modeled after myself, actually. I hate the taste but love the smell. :D Oh, and ...

I read this! I cried so hard when [spoiler]he dropped the pot over the cliff.[/spoiler] A very good book, I recommend it highly. ~Azila~

Thank you so much everyone for the (very positive) reviews! I'll go get you back, Vivi! ~Azila~

--Info-dumping-- You focus a lot on the details of the situation without describing very much. The amount of information you have is fine, but I think you should flesh it ...

Well, for instance it shouldn't be "So how was he here?" It should be "So how is he here?" I think, anyway. :roll: I don't know, I might just have ...

Pretty good. The dialogue is very realistic and all, but there are a lot of typos. Do you have a spell check? Because if you do, then you should run ...