Azila

Nice! Kind of abstract, and very poetic and pretty. I don't know that much about poetry, but I'm learning, so bear with me. :D Soil sticks to the skin, I ...

EDIT: I realized after writing this critique that the thread is from 2006, but I decided too post the review anyway... You can delete it if you want. I'll start ...

Hi! I just had to read this, because ironically, I'm working on a story about a blind person right now. The characters are quite different, naturally, but they have their ...

-Nitpicks- Gwinny squealed with delight as she tugged relentlessly on my hand, her blonde curls bouncing with [s]her[/s] enthusiasm. This is a matter of opinion, but I think this sentence ...

Hello! First off, I have to apologize. You requested a review on this like a month ago and I haven't gotten around to depositing it until now. Sooo sorry. Anyway, ...

Hi, Serena! Sorry I couldn't get this to you sooner -- I've been really busy. Because there’s something so lovely and beautiful about the good dreams, the really good ones ...

Hi! I actually quite liked this. It's short -- yes -- but I like flash-fiction. Anyway, more of that later... first I'm gonna do some nitpicks. The music forces my ...

Wow. I don't know much about poetry -- and thus don't review it much -- but I saw this on the front page and started reading... and loved it immediately. ...

Hey there! -Nitpicks- Self-consciously I look at my own beige-colored carpet littered with cheerios and crushed cracker crumbs. There should be a comma after "Self-consciously." Which reminds me that

Hey, Suz! The ice crashed around us like the sky was falling. I stood and waited while she tried to get her key into the lock. Nina’s fingers shook. I ...

Hi RandomGrrl! Oh, I'm sad that it's over... but kind satisfied with the end, all the same. [s]Lastly[/s], her eyes settled on a figure towering over her bed. She was ...

Hello! I liked this one MUCH more that part three. I actually think three was completely unnecessary. It was just an info-dump, really. I suggest you take the information from ...

Hi. Well, I liked this. But not as much as the others. Anyway, more on that later -- just now, we've got nitpicks to do! As she skipped up the ...

Hi, RG! I have to say -- I'm addicted. Especially after this intriguing addition. I will definitely be reading on. And again, I'm sorry if I repeat something someone else ...

Hey! Sorry this took so long -- I've been really busy. I'll try to get my crits of the other parts to you sooner. :D Oh, and sorry if I ...