Auxiira

Thanks for the comment Anouk! um missing words... goes and looks ... um yep I see what you mean. changes it yep, there we go ^^

Um. Zach is more worried than mad. But the only way he shows it is by yelling. He loves her and doesn't want her to feel insignificant which is why ...

Thanks for the review! It helped!

Thanks for the help!

Thanks for reviewing Kyll! I'll try and work on the points that you've told me about^^ My fight scenes really aren't good, are they... I'm going to find some help ...

Thanks again! (we haven't worked on semi-colons yet...)

thanks for the review Nate^^ Yeah those are things that I know I'm not very good at and that I'm trying to correct...

Thanks for reviewing Veeren! I haven't had too much work on dialogue in school yet since I've lived in France for 5 years now so your input really helps! You're ...

Thanks Aria! I think that in this part of the story her tribe really won't be very important,but it will be later... Of course I'll keep you posted! I have ...

I don't know if that worked Lycando. [ quote] ... [/ quote] without the spaces

Assassins, assassins, I LOVE assassins! And thieves; and people who live in jungles; and... I'm going to stop there, otherwise I'm not going to stop. I really like this story!

Ohhh, this clears up a lot about the first chapter. I really, really, really want to read more now!

Thanks for giving me these pointers! Phwooo... I'm not really very good with integrating descriptions into a text so it does sometimes end up as infodumps... same with paragraphing. It's ...

Thank you!

Haaaaa... your questions will be answered later... Zach's feelings will be revealed in the next chapter, Jack's past will be revealed...when I can make a chapter to bind it to ...