Autumn.Breeze.

Nah, I know you're not. It's just hard for me because some of the things you guys critique are things that involve the future portions of the story, so it's ...

Fangala : It's really hard to respond to this because a lot of the things you said, you have to take into account the future events of the story. So, ...

She frowned with disillusionment of the display of unacquainted happiness. It was a fixation that was truly abominable and the woman was more than jovial to be the impudence in ...

Lisa: Oh my goodness, a good chunk of the stuff you pulled out I completely missed and I'm glad you caught them. Others actually questioned my writing style which will ...

I want to say my tid bit for the thing above. I think you should keep the 'gonna' and 'wanna'. since it's in quotes, it works better than proper language. ...