Audy

Paintingtherain, I loved this ^^ It was simple and fun (and if you excuse what I'm about to do here) the rhyming was well done. Very seamless. The edits: My ...

Hello Joellevene, It seems you're new. Welcome to YWS! If you have any questions about the site or this review, just let me know. I commend you for going through ...

Freakette, I'm going to apologize in advance for this review - hastily written and probably filled with mistakes, so if you have any questions, let me know. I wanted to ...

CelticaNoir, I've already talked to you about the general things so for right now I'm just going to nitpick, simply because there's always room for improvement. Let's begin? ^^; In ...

Jas and Tori, Charlie said it all and expressed it better than I could. I was confused about this interlude. It could've been its own separate piece, because I don't ...

Circlewriter, I'm going to agree with Miyakko here. There's no emotions in this for me to believe it. In a sense though, I kind of like how we're left with ...

Jas, You've gotten great reviews for this and I agree with all of them. Especially about Chloe's deattachment. I followed them home, after the reception, after the ceremony at the ...

Jas, At first I was confused about the chapter numbers, but now I get it :) What a neat idea to switch perspectives with every "half chapter" ^-^ At least, ...

Jas! I know you said chapter two, but I'm going to start from the beginning. I didn't read all the reviews -though I noticed this has been thoroughly edited, so ...

Hey Evenslily, I just did a quick edit on the grammar and commented on some of the dialogue. I must say, you have some interesting characters here. I noticed that ...

gummiebaerrs, It's me again. He had decided to wash his hair out and make a change of clothes a few hours ago, using the patient restroom. No comma needed here, ...

Gummiebaerrs, I hope you don't mind I review this chapter as a standalone :) So let's begin, shall we? Immediately I get the impression that you're a competent writer, so ...

Hey Soulkana, I'm going to review this as a stand-alone, I hope you don't mind. So let's start: Softly comma I tuck a few of his brown locks away from ...

Angelknight, Hello! I hope you don't mind, I haven't read any of the previous chapters, but I'm excited about this one. Let's start! This conversation could not get any more ...

Freakette, I hope you excuse me for not reviewing the previous chapters. In some ways this lets me objectively review this chapter as it stands on its own. So let's ...