Arion

Um...it's hard to say. Apart from the few small typo's here and there, it seems like you have the beginnings to a well developed character, then again, there are a ...

I disagree with Chocoholic. Yes, having the mother think it's unfeminist and wrong would mix it up a bit, but that completely takes away from the main character, who doesn't ...

Curious...The vampire mythology section is just for us, right? It's not actually part of the book? After reading this over I only have a few comments. I did read your ...

Yeah, I think it would make a better story if it continued. Although, if you were to continue the only advice I would have is to make it seem more ...

The other critiques have already taken care of chapter one, I'm going to start right off the bat, with the prologue. The first sentence was quite catching, very nice, I ...