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I read that... I've actually read both of these installments. So I'm just wondering where it was that I commented. Hmm. Maybe it was at TSR or that PM. You ...

I agree with WL. It was a nice piece, Incan. The third stanza was my favorite.

Good work. Nothing negative from me. I just say more, more, more, more. I agree with Bobo though. Salvatore has claimed the panther. You should make a different animal famous. ...

That was mucho cool...o.

*Just got internet access* Haha. I did everything... 8) Anyways, your welcome MM.

I agree with Xanthan. Other than that, you might wanna try to balance it out a little more, and tweak the ending. People having trouble sleeping usually don't just drift ...

The ending's a bit foggy, but apart from that it's a nice beginning. Some elaboration, spacing, and revision would do it some good though.

I...don't get it.

Nice. And although I don't know much about poetry, I'd write it like this: Statistically, you're more likely to meet God on a dark night by the river than you ...

! It could be pretty cool, has a lot of potential. Some light revision here and there would help it a little. I'm sure you can find whats in there, ...

lol, I, KEANU REEVES, DO NOT TOLERATE THIS!

Revise revise revise! Read it silently and out loud and you should spot most of the stuff. The people above me pretty much got evrything though. Anyways, this was a ...

ROFLMAO I think I love you. Too bad you're a guy.

In that case, it's even nicer.

Cool and stuff... Purpose though? lol