Ares

You know, when I saw a topic started by you, that continued for three pages, I double-checked to see if it was locked? lol. Nice. I liked it. It was ...

Is this the new thing? That I swore I'd look at?

I agree with WL. On pretty much everything.

Oh do you now? Well we'll just have to look into that won't we? yea. (read that as a joke)

Guys, I don't think Sharty's serious. There's no way. Have you read everything she's posted? It's all just humorous. So don't be offended. Anyone. As for the poem itself. I ...

Ah, I thought so. What about the seriousness issue I mentioned?

I actually kinda like the ending, very blunt. BAM! Until you fall! Mwahahaha. It's cool.

Good start though.

Sweet. Nothing negative to say. Just...sweet.

That's great. But Barbies? Kill people, or cats, not Barbies!

I don't see why there's a lack of critiques, this is a great story so far. Anyhoo, Chapter 2... It was good. The whole time. A few words such as ...

PM me when it's revised and posted. -MH

Well then I'll just look at the new version. Doesn't that make more sense?

I'm a horrible person. And I got sidetracked on my way from our pm's to this story, so if I don't read it tonight, I will tomorrow. You have my ...

Liz (Rebelle) rocks. And this seems better than the first time I read it, over at TSR or PnP or where ever. Cool stuff. Keep it up. I hope I ...