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Re: Everyday Duels
Hi Birkhoff, here as requested! :) So, I'll start off with what I liked about this piece. I agree with Olive that having two points of view was super effective. ...
Feb 26, 2014 -
Re: Ilarien Part 1
Hi Liaya! So I thought this was a pretty cool start for a story. What I particularly found interesting at the beginning was the fact that the Queen of Winter ...
Feb 24, 2014 -
Re: Fire's Alive
Hello, gia! As one of your first pieces of writing, I thought this was really good. You use really emotive language which makes me feel really sorry for this character ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: Paper Airplanes
Hiya dark! I've always really liked your lyrics, so anyways I'll start off this review with what I liked. I think the whole metaphor of 'paper airplanes' is really good ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: An Ode To 1980's Music
Hi Strange! As a lover of the music of the 1980s, I just HAD to review this piece. I have to say, I didn't get all the references, but most ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: My version of Doppelgangers.
Hiya bird, here to review your piece! I think the style you've written in does a great job is drawing the reader in and making them want to read on ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: It Hurts Just to Wake Up
Hi again, toboldly! I can totally relate to this. Unfortunately, I don't listen to Owl City, but the whole dreams thing is something I think about all the time. I ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: Wake Chapter 1
Hi Lord! Here to review your story. So generally, I thought this was really well written! I was particularly fond of the pacing, and yeah I just think it worked ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: The Cow Boy
Yo, steph! ...I can't pull off saying 'yo' can I? :P. Anyways, I'll jump straight in with this review, I'll admit that this may have to be a shorter one ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: True Love at First Sight: My Story
Hi toboldlygo! So I agree with AE, when I was reading this I was like 'uh-oh, another cheesy love prose' but by the end I was pleasantly surprised. I thought ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: My Crazy Adventures- (M.C.A) Chapter 5: Human Struggles
Hi! Now this chapter was really interesting! You dived straight in with the action which is great, and I also kind of understand the supernatural characters a bit more? The ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: My Crazy Adventures- (M.C.A) Chapter 4: The Start of a "Hunt"
Hello! So, I'm going to jump straight in with the positives. Well, we learn a tad bit more about the characters, which is good, and more about the main character! ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: My Crazy Adventures- (M.C.A) Chapter 3: Love is only a feeling
Hey again! So I'm a bit confused as to why this is a poem, and not another piece of prose, but I can see how it relates to the rest ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: My Crazy Adventures- (M.C.A) Chapter 2: The day I met him
Hey again, Tulip! So as always, I'll start off with what I liked about this story. I like how the story progressed from the previous chapter, and I guess it ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: My Crazy Adventures- (M.C.A)Chapter 1: Pain is not just Mental
Hey Tulip! So I saw chapters of this in the Green Room, so I thought I'd review chapter one before going onto the others. I think your biggest strong point ...
Feb 23, 2014
