Arctaire

Overall I like the story, there are just something things I would suggest. Use commas more. I noticed that you really don't have commas in this story, and there's a ...

Wow, I haven't read your novel, but this does a great job as a stand alone short story. I do not see any flaws in it what so ever, minus ...

I’m just going to put some things that I believe would sound/flow better for the first paragraph that can be applied throughout the chapter. Parentheses are the changes I’d suggest. ...

Very well written, I enjoyed it very much. I don't know if it's in much poetry, don't read too much, but I really like the group of stanzas and then ...

Well this is depressing, emotional, and sadly very realistic. A very well done poem. It captures a lot, I think, about humans and emotions. How there are differences between all ...

The background/idea of this is very unique, even though It is a very dark/sombre setting it has a lot of potential. Some things I noticed was you said "Will" multiple ...

Well that ending took a turn I wasn't really expecting. I like it. For me I got this sense of a kid and this being told by his imaginary friend. ...

I really enjoyed this, seems like you are off to a great start to this story. Other than a few grammar issues I don't really see any problems with this ...