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Re: Mythological Fantasy: C1: The creation {EDITED V1}
The creation There was a time before man and before the gods, a time even before Earth. In this time there was nothing. A vast black abyss of endless proportion ...
Jun 7, 2010 -
Re: I Think I'm In Love
I love the rythm and beat. I have a few things I would change, but I love it. :) I think I'm in love, When I first read this I ...
Jun 4, 2010 -
Re: Love Has No Boundaries-Ch-2
Chapter-2 The train was moving to and fro, giving me jerks now and then. I pressed my head against the window, and scrunched shut my eyes for a second. The ...
Jun 3, 2010 -
Re: Love Has No Boundaries (I) {EDITED*}
I am not sure what the exact temperature was, but I’m sure it was something above forty degree Celsius. It was enough to extract every ounce of energy out of ...
Jun 3, 2010 -
Re: Old Poem Dump I
Comments in red :) Today I Learned in Biology This was my favorite. Probably because I don't feel like being deep right now, but still :). I love that you ...
Jun 3, 2010 -
Re: Cha-chew It (an Undo It by Carrie Underwood parody)
I loved this. I had the song playing the background and all the lines worked as far as I can see. I was trying not to laugh the whole entire ...
May 28, 2010 -
Re: That Funny, Tickling Feeling...
I don't have time to do a long review, but this is what I didn't like most: This is all new to me, But please just promise me, That you'll ...
May 25, 2010 -
Re: Needle and Thread
ziggiefred said that she didn't get the meaning. I think you ment to say that once all the pain is gone you are nothing. A husk. As for the structure ...
May 20, 2010 -
Re: Body and Spirit
Though I do not agree with the statement I think it is a fairly good poem. But, your rhyming scheme is all over the place. You need to be more ...
May 20, 2010 -
Re: My Heart Flutters
I really like this poem though sadly I have never loved a guy before.
May 18, 2010 -
Re: stars and palms
I really like this poem. It could be a little longer, but it doesn't need that. The second stanza kind of jolted me out of my trance you made with ...
May 18, 2010 -
Re: Morse Lake
I Love this
May 18, 2010 -
Re: What Is This?
I agree, the first line should go. I also think the second to last line should go. Transforming all the old to new. I don't really know why I would, ...
May 17, 2010 -
Re: Hypotheses
First, I don't know anything about poems. I just pretend like I do :D Anyway I read this poem 3 times, and I think it is really good. It doesn't ...
May 11, 2010 -
Re: Twisted
Hi, you are going to love this sight. As long as you don’t mind nitpicks that is. I agree with Biffle1 you are very talented. But, I also agree with ...
May 11, 2010
