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Re: The Secret Diary of a Criminal (Prologue)
Really good piece, but I found a single error that seems to be obvious. In the last paragraph, the sentence reads: I try to cling on, but my own weight ...
Mar 6, 2012 -
Re: The Magical Ones (Chapter 1)
I loved this so much! It's really good. There wasn't much that I could find wrong. There was only one error that happens a lot to me. "All the while, ...
Feb 22, 2012 -
Re: The Magical Ones (Chapter 1)
Ignore
Feb 22, 2012 -
Re: Short Action Scene
This is a really good action scene. When I'm at school bored, I sit there and write short stories that are mainly action scenes such as this one, and use ...
Jan 10, 2012 -
Re: The Conversation of Cats Part 4
Really good! i love it! you have some good writing skills leahweird. Its really descriptive and some good vocabulary. I wish I had your descriptiveness and vocab so that my ...
Nov 21, 2011 -
Re: Gravity's Pull
Really good! i love it! you have some good writing skills ahhhsmusch. Its really descriptive and some good vocabulary. I wish I had your descriptiveness and vocab so that my ...
Nov 21, 2011 -
Re: Buying Time
This is really good Ancient! I agree with ajt about the cat and the twist is shocking. Third Person Omniscient seems to come easily to you, but its harder for ...
Nov 20, 2011 -
Re: Untitled as of Yet. (Unfinished)--[DELETED]
Really good! i love it! you have some good writing skills Devan. Its really descriptive and some good vocabulary. I wish I had your descriptiveness and vocab so that my ...
Nov 20, 2011 -
Re: The Corner of the World
Really good! i love it! you have some good writing skills ancient. Its really descriptive and some good vocabulary. I wish I had your descriptiveness and vocab so that my ...
Nov 20, 2011