Aragi

This could've been all one chapter. Don't see the need to have it be two. If you want to split the scenes, do so with a scene break. Plenty of ...

This reads closer to poetry than Literature. I like it regardless albeit quite hard to follow the stream of ideas in each paragraph.

Sorry "that real people would" should be changed into "that real people wouldn't."

They wear Casual clothing because they try to attempt to seem more normal than they really are, I thought it was assumed because of April being in a school even ...

Tried to fix the grammatical errors, but what do you mean by "wierd" sentences? I have heard this from many people several times but I haven't figured out where they ...

whoops, thehotinpsychotic beat me in first review :D

Wow, thats all I can really say, the odds of this are really small. Well, I suppose I can say that you would make a great English teacher. Judging from ...

Thanks for the review, I have noticed that all of the reviewers that read essay formatted works seem much more "adult like" or mature at the least. I can even ...

By the way, I am currently working on editing my second chapter, so be aware of the new works page!

Here guys, an updated version of my work.

I fixed it, I will be reuploading the work soon after I fix the rest of the mistakes the other guys mentioned.

Can't believe you're sixteen, talent is apparent in this work. Made me smile, made me laugh, and made me glad to be on this website. That's all I have to ...

Thanks for reading my old friend, i appreciate it.

No, I'm a Number....(inside joke)

"That is there only purpose in life." In the second paragraph, "there" is supposed to be "their." And sorry, my emotions spilled a anyway...keep writing.