Apple

Hey, Apple here. So I thought that I'd get straight into the review then lighten it up with all the parts of this story that I absolutely adored at the ...

Hey, Apple here. I think that you've done a really good job with the prologue here. What I see these days is people writing prologues and not taking in the ...

Hey, Apple here. I think me and the first reviewer differ very strongly. Firstly I thought this was one of your best chapters. It showed more closely how they react ...

This was a really nice start but I am sorry, I have to be blunt and ignore your second post: this is just way to short to be anything. Now ...

Wow, to me this seemed like a part in a story that was set just to explain a world. Hmm, as a reader I wouldn't reccomend it for a singular ...

Hey Skinsy, Another great post. Again I feel very useless because as usual instead of feeding me steak, you give me the Eiffel Tower. See what I did there? A ...

There is too much dialouge here. Way to much. Actually, that's practically all this chapter is. This is not what you want. You want a reader to get an idea ...

Apple here, rearing to review! Wow Cspr, I never realised you were such a good writer. Oh dang, I don't want to sound rude but this is great! Your emotion, ...

Alright, change the title, it does nothing for you. Now I don't mean to be rude but when I started reading I got a surprise because what I initially thought ...

Hey, Apple here. Firstly I am going to point out just how much I love your title and the plot of this. I was interested straight away and I even ...

Alright, so I waddle in here expecting to see class A work but when I start reading with my fake glasses, eyebrows and nose and I see A +++ work ...

Hello, Apple here. So I was surfing the threads (literally) and I overcame this little doo-hicky. I opened it straight away and read from bottom to top without stopping. And ...

Hello, Apple here. I really like your story. Straight away when I started reading I was pulled in -- from the first chapter -- and sent on a magical journey ...

Hey, Apple here. What have you done here, Pixie? You've added bits of coding which in writing the chapter you never should use. Don't worry, I am here to help ...

Heyo, Apple here. It sounds like a Disney movie. I love Disney movies! Your narrative voice is hilarious and Jinx is just the strawberry to top the cake. I really ...