AntonioRivera

Yeah it's going to be a longer story! Thanks for the suggestions.

Thanks for the review! I tell you, it's tough to keep the story entertaining all the way, but hey, that's my job so thanks for pointing that out! And as ...

Thanks Noelle! Great review, honestly! The lecture was something I actually didn't know haha so that seriously helped! Thanks again and I didn't mean to put this under the category ...

Thanks for your thoughts!

Thank you very much! You have suggestions that I DEFINITELY will incorporate somehow and give thought to! I plan on writing more very soon :) and editing haha

It's okay! And hopefully, in the future, you'll like one of my characters. As for Corvo, that's just how he speaks unfortunately :/

Thanks for the review! I usually don't explain myself because it should be evident in the reading, but I want to assist you! :) The first sentence automatically tells that ...

Thank you thank you once again! I'm going to keep reading your advice and see what I can plug into the story!

EDITED!

Thank you very much for the review! I'm literally about to add the edited version now, so check it out! And the second chapter is going to be edited in ...

Hey thanks for your suggestions! I edited this part about 2 days ago, I just forgot to update it on here. And there is a second chapter, check my profile!

Thanks again! And I should let you know that I edited the story, but forgot to post it up :/ haha! I fixed some things that you mentioned here, so ...

Thanks a lot! Everything that you've mentioned is of great critique! I appreciate it and I will go with your suggestions :D

Your review did help! Thanks a lot :D And I see you mentioned the dialogue thing haha! I drove my teacher nuts with that. But I recently read, "Dairy of ...

Hey, this helped TREMENDOUSLY! Now I know exactly what I have to work on, and I'll get to it immediately!