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Re: Saved
This was very well written and your flow was on point. I'm a christian and I've been through some things that made me wonder and question God and this really ...
Feb 18, 2012 -
Re: Breaking Free: Chapter 1
This was really interesting. You had actuallly grabbed my curiosity and kept it. What I liked most was that you were able to portray your characters' emotions so that the ...
Jan 4, 2012 -
Re: Fakebook- Introduction
So many good posts and here I am, as late as ever. I agree with your previous reviewers. There are a few grammatical mistakes that you made and I think ...
Dec 6, 2011 -
Re: Just a Bus Note
i disagree with your previous reviewer. If it's a true story, it doesn't really need more detail. You're just using the info you got. This story touched me and it ...
Nov 26, 2011 -
Re: when a boy loves a ghost Chapter 1
Yeah you obviously need to look this over because what really angers a lot of readers is when they read a novel with poor grammar. I will fix everything thought. ...
Nov 25, 2011 -
Re: please delete post
I like it and it was so true. What I will say is that my favorite part is the part when the person talks to their daydreams. The beginning with ...
Nov 25, 2011 -
Re: Fallen Snow
I like it. It's simple so you're not ruining the poem by being over dramatic. Yet, even though it's simple I'm not able to generate a sort of obvious emotion ...
Nov 25, 2011 -
Re: An Ugly Girl
Wow this was wonderful but I do agree with your first reviewer. I was confused but it was a good confused. I liked that I could feel emotion from this ...
Nov 23, 2011 -
Re: redacted
Lol, yah some of those band names did throw me off but it's still good. To get it more, I actually read in a slam poetic fashion and it actually ...
Nov 18, 2011 -
Re: Jealousy
i liked this. I think that you caught the true essence of jealousy and you had all the details of how jealousy feels like to a person, but-yes there's a ...
Nov 18, 2011 -
Re: “Sanctuary”
I liked this poem and I think it's still not done. It actually reminded me of a freestyle poem when the speaker just goes on and on and on but ...
Nov 7, 2011 -
Re: The Seaman's song.
This was really good and what I liked most was the flow it had because it actually ended up sounding like a song. The rhyming was on point and the ...
Nov 7, 2011 -
Re: Apple Cherry Pie...and other sweet things.
Hmmm, I like your story here but I'm not too sure about it. I like how you put four perspectives into this and I do agree with you that this ...
Nov 7, 2011 -
Re: Breast cancer awareness
I agree with your previous reviewer. I think that you should have start off with the family story which would have caught people's attention. I think that you should have ...
Nov 5, 2011 -
Re: Aster
Hmmm, I'm going to have to think about what I said so let me tell you what's coming to mind right now. I like it but I would like it ...
Nov 5, 2011
