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i think it's going to be the conclusion of a piece...but i haven't decided where to go with it yet. lol. yes. the theme is very vague. i know it ...

thank you :D

I don't know; did I ruin the metaphor by adding in extra details to Emmaline's part of the story? I think I did. I wish one of you could tell ...

thanks for the input! i wasn't intending for the repetition to become obnoxious the "i'm sorry that" was supposed to be the focus of the poem--how seemingly desperate apologies change ...

yes, it wasn't really much of a story, more like a personal rant transformed into a fictitious work. maybe i'll shape it up a bit and give it a storyline.

pretty good =DD i like the ending a lot.

i likes it but roya explainnn i am confoozled.

that was great! i'm no good at writing short stories but you got your point across amazingly. i love the ending. =DD

that was freaking amazing! really great point to the story...awesome way to get it across! your imagery is excellent and you have a great vocabulary!

ah, this is such a relief from some other really typical stories i've seen on yws...and in books, actually. great job! keep writing!

i think it was nice and interesting =) could be a tad longer, but you know, it's not as though you have to lengthen it. =) keep writing!

marcus flint is the name of that one dood in harry potter XD lots of grammatical errors, but you can fix those =) just develop a bit more of a ...

i think people are being a bit too picky. since this is JUST an idea thus far, it's a really good start. very imaginative. =) keep writing!

i am not much for critiquing poems since i am more of a storywriter myself, but i thought this was excellent and i loved it!! =D

hahaha claudette changed my post to dang yeah cuz i said a bad word =X XDD