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I liked it very much, it was strong, the words were dominating and kept my interest. The meaning was easy to see, but the way you described it was sweeping. ...

Oh my, this was very strong. You're word choice was excelletn and made me look deeper but didn't confuse me. I thought it was suposed to be flame. It sounded ...

Yeah, the line repeat was terrible. I liked it, the imagery was good, but it didn't seem to flow. It was thick and clanky. I like the general feel it ...

I liked it, reminds of Evanessence. Hopefully that isn't an insult to you, but the idea made me think of her and I hear Amy Lee's voice when I read ...

Is it a duet? I think you better finish it soon, it reminds me of Scooby-Doo. It looks good so far.

ermm......Where's Brad when you need him? I suck at math, so much of this went over my head. I dont know. *bursts into wild applause*

An interesting concept, very beowulf-esqe. I suggest more figurative language as you descripbe things. It will help add to the mystical feel of the poem.

The Highwind fell into normal space, immediatly detecting the Peregrine and Gryphon . A small light flashed on Adam's control panel, Adelaide appeared on his screen. "Well, long time no ...

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I think this is more of romantic fiction than lyrics. Moved

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This takes me back, Way back actually. Funny how things happen and work out.

Repairs seemd to take forever. The Omega containment field nearly collapsed a number of times, forcing the Station to evacuate while Adam restabilzed it. "We're ready to head out!" Adam ...

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