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I think the last line is a typ, cause it makes no sense as Madd pointed out. I'm pretty sure the last line is to signify what class you are ...

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Totally musical aterial there. I think it has great potential actually. Just keep going. Let love see her through. Wasn't crazy about that line, it sounded a little cliche to ...

I love these, you're very good at the cover art.

Yeah, These are too close to each other, And I've heard the song before(being the massive nerd that I am) This looks like really bad paraphrasing. You've already been warned ...

Adam recived a message from Sabradan, it was encoded in the encrption program Adam had created those many moons ago. After a few quick commands the file opened at once. ...

This looks like poetry to me. I think it should be in the poetry section. *moved*

He does not want to keep the beard because he says, “it looked so strange to see a man with a bear d boxing” (311) Looks pretty good to me. ...

The Highwind dropped out of Forum Jump between the Mighty Duck and the Pillar class vessels. The shields pulsed and flared as they defended the already damaged ship. Adam held ...

How wonderful! the CCF song is perfect. You know us so well, CL. :)

Interesting. Would have been a nasty shock if somone found you all electrocuted though. That would have been like a suicide note or something. Glad your better sense took hold ...

O_O I just got a little chill. The words were seamless, I mean they just went in and out and it never chopped up or anything. I really think this ...

It sounded good. The beginning was a little rocky but it really flowed along nicely after that. Stupid Boys! I like the ryhme scheme, it helped keep the song moving.

An interesting image if a critiquer. I liked the imagery very much and th feeling was rather amusing. I'm sure many people have felt this way after a critique.