Alteran

Very good. Obviously a rough draft, but still very attention grabbing. Wrenched open, the window breathes stale air and city damp. Dusk-li[s]m[/s]ned silhouetted skyline breaks its reflection; and in

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It has a nice thought, but the execution is a bit weak. It would help if you were more involved with the character. The way it is written is sort ...

Chapter IV: Case 01- The Three Bells of Wavend -Part 1- Water was the elemental mother of Wavend. Under the ceiling of stars, her watery surface sparkled and caressed the ...

Chapter One On the rolling thunder and pouring rain I’m coming on like a hurricane White lightning’s flashing across the sky You’re only young but you’re gonna die It was ...

It felt a bit flemsy to me. The dialogue itself was very good, but the sotry didn't seem strong enough. It just felt to random, the resolution didn't match any ...

Aww, how cute. Sounds like a ture hero to me. The description got a little rough in the middle. I had to reread it a few times to get it, ...

It sounds nice, but I don't really catch the meaning. I think it has something to do with some people ant all the extravagant tings in life while others are ...

That went a little over my head as far as meaning, but the images are strong. I like how it created an odd reading because of the way you broke ...

The start of the 2007 season marked the Mountaineers 79th year participating in college football, and even though after those 79 years as a program they were a little known ...

Chapter Three Meanwhile, when [s]any[/s] every one least expected it , an experiment was going on in Denver, Colorado. Doctor Stevens a blond who was constantly compared to a certain ...

"Nanci Walker?!" he exclaimed. The dad couldn't believe it. This was no doubt two of the four missing teenagers that had disappeared without a trace six months ago. And now ...

The room was cold. Not the kind of icy chill that creeps on your skin as it is snowing, but an artificial cold, as if you were spending your time ...

I’m in a crowd, searching for a certain someone. I don’t know who this person is, but I trust my instincts to know him or her when I see the ...

The three of them stood in the center of the cave, ready for action, but nothing came at them. Seth felt his heart race. More would come soon , [s]and ...