Alteran

I've critted on this on TSR but i just wanted to know how the next part was coming? Oh and i noticed all of your revisions well most of them ...

It is interesting. I haven't read the others but you tell the whole thing. I mean i tell a lot too but i try to show when i know i ...

Atlantis! OMG I love Atlantis. One major thing i noticed was your main characters name changed frome Antrea in the beginning to Andrea and then back to Antrea. “Nothing Mama. ...

Start of a short fantasy.... --- Chapter One - Creation The mauve sand swept onto the dunes and formed spiralling eddies around the feet of the Master. The sand was ...

This is what i said on TSR and i think it's so cool and good and wonderful. I love it. You did such a good job. How very very lovely. ...

Not sure how well this gonna work but hopefully the transfer will be okay. This is the first part and i'll get to the second as soon as i can. ...

This is interesting. I think you could really have more fun with this. Take advantage of the creative process. You can really do whatever you want even in fanfic. Of ...

Nice little story you have here. I like the dark fantasy feel. The story is good but you need to flesh it out more. Give descriptions of the characters. And ...

I thought it should be more... i cant think of a word. Elaborate maybe. I think it could use a bit more detail and information. I like the randomness. I ...

I thought it was great. Other than the typos i think it stood a good chance. It really expresses how a fantasy writers thoughts are hard to share cause sometimes ...