Alteran

This looks to be very interesting. The pacing is good throughout the chapter and carries the reader through. Biggest issue is word sequence. There are a number of places where ...

This is interesting to say the least. I enjoyed your piece, but I did have trouble following in some places. It moves very quickly and very randomly in spots. It's ...

This is very nice. The beginning felt slightly sluggish, but It caught my interest pretty quick. I did notice a few misspellings, I think. Due to the fact I'm from ...

This looks to have a promise. I like your beginnings for what could be a good story, but there are places that can be improved upon. My first notice is ...

Let us Begin, There are a number of minor typos in this. I believe you can filter them out with a few read throughs. Reading your story out loud to ...

I sense a lot of emotion in this, it can be better expressed. The thing that jumps at me first is that you need to capitalize your i's. Believe it ...

I like your description of the event, however I think you need to ditch the spoiler thing. If you think it needs to be rated higher than do it in ...

I awoke in shock. The room was quiet as I examined it with curiosity. From what I could tell I was a in log cabin. In fact everything was made ...

This is picking up after the 'my opinion' comment in the library. I hope you enjoy! “Whatever, Jane,” I shrugged. “Fine, you enjoy it when Mr. Jones has his way ...

I love this. Like ridiculous I'm addicted now. "Hold on, Alora!" I pulled out an arrow and replaced it with the dagger. Aiming carefully I shot multiple arrows at the ...

This is part of a novel. See the tab at the top to read the rest. … “What are you doing, lying there like a slob!” (This should all be ...

I remember holding Alora in my arms. The heat from the torches illuminated the cave giving her face an orange glow. She was beautiful. I ripped the cloth from her ...

Okay, This has the potential for something very interesting, but right now it's a bit confusing. Too much is happening to really follow it. We need to focus on the ...

I quite enjoyed reading this. More than I thought I would in all honesty. I like that with as many characters as you have you seem to focus more on ...

Shakespeare’s Macbeth, is a tragedy of betrayal, hunger for power, and gruesome acts of murder. A seed of greed for the throne is planted in Macbeth’s mind, when the three ...