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I really did enjoy your story and where it is going. I'm going to admit I did have some troubles staying focused though. Not because of the plot or anything ...

I am really liking where this story is going. It kept my attention the whole time I was reading which is always an important thing and you only had a ...

The only real thing that I can critique on is maybe 3 spelling/punctuation mistakes which is great. I am completely in love with this and throughout the whole thing it ...

I only found 1 word that was misspelled which is always the first thing I check for when reading anything. I liked how you were very detailed but I also ...

I like were this story is going. You kept it interesting which was very good. The main problems I saw were missing spaces a few times and not putting words ...

I like where this story is going and I'm looking forward to reading more of it! The only things I'm going to critique on are that you had a few ...