Alliaaryn5665

Hi, Personally, I adored this. While you could have made it longer with detail, you really didn't need to. Hands met throat; grip the last thing needed. “Come out come ...

Hi, Oh my goodnss! I love this! It is brilliant!There were many gammar mistakes. For example: His body was now that of a professional wrestler. Corded veins of muscle ran ...

Hi, While I really didn't get what was happening most of the time, this was cute, funny, and weird. I liked it, though it needs work. Oh, and what do ...

Hi, I love this. There are a few nitpicks though. Grammar! There's this too: “Mailbox!” she shouted, and I smiled as I as took off after her. We shot down ...

Hi, Here to review as a whole! Here goes: I'm just a girl you know, one of those Capitalization broken, CAPS insecure, CAPS colourful kids Caps? the ones you say ...

Hi, I thought I would review the poem as a whole. So, here goes: Wild, rapid movements, With which I express myself. There's nothing That can hold me back or ...

Hi, I absolutely cracked up at Jake and what he said at the end! Oh my goodness, nice touch! I love this chapter especially. Though, I don't exactly see how ...

Hi, I really like this piece. Your imagery is fantastic, but your grammar isn't, in some spots. You forgot commas. I had issues with the dialogue. I could rarely ever ...

Hi, I loved this!! I really loved the fist paragraph but the second could uses teensy bit more detail. I didn't quite understand it. This was very good! You had ...

Hi, I really enjoyed this. I love historical-fiction. This has an accurate portrayal of a soldier's view of a coward. I love how you had them as friends/family in the ...

Hi, I enjoyed this very much! I can not wait to read more, if there will be more. It has me guessing as to what will happen. I adore how ...

Hi, I absolutely love this! I though I would use the whole poem to review, so here goes: Cruising on a river of air Searching for a tropical paradise He ...

Hi, Wow, uh, I have some things to point out so I'll just use the whole poem. Here goes: One evening as I was going out for the party, I ...

Hi, Well, I saw some mistakes. Like, grammar and spelling. For example, it's YOU'D HAVE not you'd of. “What are you doing here?” he asked the girl “This place isn’t ...

Hi, You are fantastic!! Oh my goodness! I absolutely loved this! Your vocab was impeccable, your flow was phenominal, and your rhyming was amazing! I aboslutely loved how you repeated ...