Aley

Thank you for answering all of my questions. I will work on making simple sentences naturally instead of my long compounds. One idea-one sentence. One overall theme/image-one paragraph. Something like

I have to disagree with you about why people write poetry. I believe that poetry is written as a way to communicate ideas, thoughts, stories, beliefs, and history from one ...

Dear Sherlock, My method of changing who was speaking, was to indent Inari's speech. Because you said that, perhaps I need to indent it more? I don't want to put ...

While I appreciate what you're saying and understand that something like this villanelle structured poem isn't for everyone, could you please explain where you feel that it is cramped? I ...

I think it's really funny that everyone is picking up on the villanelle structure, without actually saying, OH MY! THIS POEM ISN'T IN FREE VERSE IT'S IN A STRICT FORM! ...

This is what I was using for my writing form.

(I was also a member of FIRST so this is not completely alien to me.) As a general guideline, when you first mention something like FIRST you want to write ...

Thank you so much for your comments. I hadn't realized I was making the dialogue stiff or repeating myself enough that people would notice. As I go back through and ...

I was trying to put in the car problems as something that was serious which they were dismissing as nothing, while I knew otherwise. I have to figure out a ...

I like the overall attitude the poem takes after finishing the end, so I don't have much to critique in the way of plot or context. I think you picked ...

Thank you all for reviewing and if you read this I'd like to explain a little to hopefully see if it came across as I intended. Jas- I agree, the ...