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I also got the very Victorian Shakespeare feel from this poem which I think really says quite a bit about your character. All the same I shall refrain from such ...

This seems somewhat disconnected to me because the first stanza doesn't quite follow the last in syllables. The first stanza ends quite solidly with golf because of the nice cut ...

I find that the beat is broken up with the arise rather than emphasized with it because you have the same lines over and over with a few changes. Generally ...

I feel like you knew what you wanted to talk about in the poem, but your determination to keep with the rhyme scheme hindered what you wanted to say. From ...

This poem has a lot of good imagery but you should watch out for using the same object for two different things. To describe a day, you used a windy ...

The poem didn't really attract me until you reached more of a loose style actually saying something rather than describing things. I feel like the repetitiveness of the word Rain ...

I enjoyed this poem because it not only explained the infatuation in a way that made it seem reasonable, but it also was a last stand at the end rather ...

I feel like you wrote the poem mainly out of spite for something that happened, but at the same time it confused me. The physical does not exactly match up ...

This poem does do good as a poem really capturing the action in the battle, but not as much as the emotions with how broken up the lines are. I ...

I feel like the poem was a little broken up with the punctuation. If you go through and read it again I think you'll get the rhythm down better than ...