Aley

Hello Messenger, I'm here to give you what you will hopefully consider some good feedback on this poem of yours. I recognize that it's an older piece, written back in ...

I'm just going to point a few quick things out so that you can go through and make this a bit better. First, with how you have your paragraphs set ...

Hey, Aley here to review your chapter again. I feel like this chapter takes another step from the episode I saw last time when I was reading about Wobbuffet. You ...

Alright, so first thing I'd suggest, simplify your works so we actually know what is chapter one and what isn't chapter one. Put a date in the title or something ...

It's interesting that you've added a maturity to these youngens who are playing with Pokemon for the first time. Having our main character actually attracted to his rival is an ...

I think that you capture the pokemon world well enough that I don't need to do a review on how that is going for you. Personally I find more of ...

Hi, Aley here for a review for you~ First I'd like to say that it is a really unique way to describe running and I like how you have the ...

Hi. I'm going to note things as I read then come back and make a sandwich if I have time. I'm going to censor swear words just for the sake ...

I'm going to try CowLogic's thing with not talking directly to you but giving a solid review.

Hello Clarity, While I appreciate that this is a metaphorical river and not a real river, I think you've made something of a mistake in drawing too far into the ...

Hey Nikita, Review Day Here

Hi! Review day here

This is a very interesting poem. I think you do something kind of unique with how you talk about mentors as these lying people who really might not be telling ...

"Sherlock was no medical professional, but that couldn't be good. John was losing blood at an alarming rate." Actually, he is pretty close to a medical professional considering how much ...

You do a good job of keeping the tension going, although I don't really like that Sherlock keeps getting hurt through these trials. It seems like something that the enemy ...