Alexwriter

When we first met each other, we were naive and very young. The two of us were different , This doesn't feel quite right but we always had fun. This ...

“Yeah everything’s fine, but I have to go now sorry. I’ll see you after school tomorrow Ellie?” He didn’t wait for my reply, and instead half walked – half ran ...

This story was so touching that I have goosebumps right now! I love how it was written and the way the characters were portrayed. It shows that despite their youth, ...

This was a good piece of writing and don't worry, most writers dislike their work (I know I do) but anywho the middle of the night is when I'm most ...

This was good for such a short poem. However, if you have punctuation at the end of a line, the first letter of the next line should be a capital. ...

This was very well written and other than grammatical errors (which have already been pointed out) I couldn't find much fault with it. I would have liked a bit more ...

This was beautiful, haunting and so wonderfully written. It' an amazing piece of work. Though it did leave me questioning HOW she became a tree but that is a small ...

At first it was difficult to settle into the dialect but, once i did, it was easy to imagine this slightly unhinged woman. I found this piece funny because of ...

Ok I'm officially a fan! You're really quite talented and paint a great image. The flow needs a bit of a tweak but otherwise it was a wonderful piece of ...

This was brilliant. Other than some grammatical errors I've found nothing to critique!!!! It was dark and sinister and quite creepy so it was the sort of thing I love ...

"I hate you mum!" I slammed the door hard, the old and rotten building shook and the door cracked at the side. I let out a long and painful sigh. ...

I agree with perdido except you don't need to capitalise the first letter if you're using enjambment With your silken feet resting on vain sediment and subservient ocean weed; You ...

You asked where I stopped reading? Well.... I didn't! I'm pretty damn hooked on this :D Plus i love the title FREAK (as a Freak, I can completely respect that)

Unfortunately I agree that this does have similarities to Twilight in the ways Borntobeawriter mentioned. But I loved that Athira has a much stronger voice. I also love her name. ...

Damn. Part of me was hoping to return the scalding (but thoroughly helpful) review you gave one of my short stories. But my hopes were dashed when you sucked me ...