Alarainya

That was amazing I love stories like that! You did a wonderful job! You wrote it wonderfully just give a bit more of the characters feelings and it will be ...

RAWR, I always do that! Don't mind the [i] I forgot to make it in italics...sorry!

All I have to say is that chapter was way too short, and now that the reader finds out more about this guy and what he did to this girl ...

I liked this chapter a lot, but I think its weird that she gets so angry at Nora. Other than that I really liked this chapter, it was very good. ...

Thank you very much for reading it! I'm so glad you like it! Thanks. -Rhiine

Thank you very much for your crits everyone! They're very helpful! I'll work on possibly rewriting the prologue, but then again I may move on to the next chapter, we'll ...

oops, I meant for the story to be in italics, so just ignore the little [i] I had some issues with the computer!

oh, and when I said "him" in the crit part, I meant Carmen. Just in case you're confused!

Thank you! I appreciate your crits, they are very helpful!

I thought it was good, but the begining confused me a bit, I had to read it over to understand it. The end was very good, and it proved your ...

OH MY GOODNESS GRACIOUS!!!!!! That was amazing it made me want to cry! It is really good, I thought the choppyness kind of suited it. To me it seemed like ...