Alainna

This is still going strong and the writing is very powerful. I think you maybe could have combined Chapter 3 and Chapter 4 because they were both quite short. We ...

Another good installment. I suppose we could go on forever, waiting for the end, or like so many others we could just hang up on our chance for a new ...

Right, this was a great start and definitely intriguing. I really loved some of your description, it worked very well. Last name, not important. This is slightly unnecessary, it interrupts ...

Hey Meeves, a new story....... As always you easily hook the reader, which is fantastic. I definitely want to know more about these characters, where they are, who they are. ...

That was quite...an....inspirational piece. I REALLY liked it!!! I liked the flow, not rhyming, just right. I liked this: Prophecies aren't blotchy ink on parchment or printed pages and stamped ...

I think Elein went through most of the sticky stuff, which saves me a job..yay! I really liked the first line. It's what grabbed my attention. At some stages I ...

This was good. The flow wasn't great and there was something missing....although I'm not sure what.... :? I liked the repetition; but it was slightly over used at times.... I ...

He's fallen in love with Chris????!!!!! OMG!!! I feel so....sad.... Great irony!!!! Very shocking yet works well!! I let me hand fall away from him. Just a typo........lol. Great as ...

This was very good. I didn't quite get the whole 'from fun' thing but I enjoyed the rest of it. This was great: And as I tore down the sharp ...

Yay!! Another great piece, Meeves! Loved this: Its strange, the girls all dance provocatively, trying to attract the boys, when they do they saunter off into a corner and make ...

This was really good, obviously personal, but others can relate to it. I loved this: I stare at it and remember when I held your hand in mine and I ...

Yep, there are a few technical errors but they have already been pointed out, so I wont bother....... The poem itself was very good. It was clear and meaningful, with ...

Wow. This was great, the rhyming worked, the reader can relate, it was technically well balanced....... It got better as it went along, the beginning wasn't quite as strong as ...

Good poem, I liked it! This was great: To be cherished by an earnest eye; A treasure to which all may come by. Good rhyming!! This needs to be improved: ...

I really liked this, the meaning, the words you used. I loved this: Build a castle from grains of time we spent together To improve: You said it yourself, it's ...