Alainna

Hello Heather! First off I did really like this poem. The first four stanzas in particular I felt were very good. I think stanza six is your weakest, whilst stanza ...

This was a very original and lovely piece; the description worked well. The way you described the colours was not in the least tiring- which I was worried it was ...

Well, that was short but sweet. Is there any more to it? It was good and I liked your characters- though you say it is based on a poem so ...

This was another good piece Liz. It wouldn't be until I was banished from the coven that I'd find out; she hated it here, just like me Perhaps a slight ...

Ah, I'm glad we get to know a little more about Adel know. It certainly works to use a flashback. Eight years before Just slows that part down. Eight years ...

*Useless post coming up......* All grammar etc fixed therefore my job is easy... I must praise you for how well this is going. Your writing has grown and improved as ...

1984 was an excellent book to read and I thought the story line was so memorable. As others have said- it's a good scary way to look at society and ...

Hey Liz, sorry it took me so long!! Ah, this bit was short but I liked it and found less mistakes than in the first part; which is good. although ...

Hey Liz! Well, this has a really intriguing storyline and I will try to read more if you post. I did like it! If only it was that simple, these ...

I have to agree with Squallz, I'm hooked on this just from the prolouge! It was very nicely written and the church scene was great. I'd like to know more ...

This was nice- if rather short. A tad predictable but it worked well. Grandma whispers, loudly, trying not to be heard. It just doesn't make sense. If this is an ...

This was a really good idea, however some of the errors weighed it down and I read it with less excitement than when I started. *My suggestions are in bold. ...

Schizophrenic or not this piece was very good. I found no mistakes, which is great! Can anyone hear her talking to Quincy or is the conversation taking place in her ...

*The following is from someone who generally can not write poems and knows little about them...* This was good. I liked it. Good stuff- Your rhythm. Worked well to keep ...

Hey JC!!! I feel better now that I've had my regular fix of POD...I mean...now that I've read it..lol. She tossed on to Jamie. * one supposed to be [s]a[/s] ...