Aedomir

Tears. A very original topic, and didn't know non-ficiotn could be so interesting! A never knew so much could be put about tears either, could job there and especially with ...

lol people do usually write in diaries evryday but I would make sure that everything i the diaries you choose to add are relevant to the stroline...

Having said that, I would say that all these novellas you have been writing, you should put them together and make them into a collection of short stories, that's be ...

Wow thanks that was far more helpful lol! Character development: 8/10 Plot development: 9.5/10 (great job there!!!) Descriptions: 6.5/10 Wording: 6/10 Grammar: 7/10 Originality: 6/10 (change the name

This is my favourite of the book so far, good job! I liked the way your character kept on thinking what he thought, it is a good way to get ...

thats helpful

Thanks for the review... It was my first attempt and character history, and incorporating the main storyline. Seridon knows more than Aedomir because Seridon has been alive for the last ...

Hi! As always, I am grateful for your reviews. One things definatley shines out: Messiness... I think maybe its the constant battles I have going on. If you think about ...

Thanks Jabber! Nice suggestions, it works much better now thanks

Hi guys! Thanks for the reviews. I know that wasn't brilliant... Shall I be honest? OK. Well, I wrote that in like October... That was when I was coming up ...

thanks for all the critcs everyone

thanks for the crits every1! yet again great reviews. does the last sentence mean he is dead? or seomthing else... find out this week...

Ye sure no prob jabber. Thanks for the review, I take it your the punctuation person!

Ye, sorry, I didn;t mean it like that. It was kind of you to write that long critique, thanks.

lol, I like short, to the point stories. I can;t really talk about grammar, it seems fine to me. I wonder why he wants the chocolate... let's go find out! ...