Aedomir

Again, the tone and the rhythm was great, its just that there wasn't a lot there if you get my meaning. Its a bit flat. The emotive language wasn't there ...

? You posted this on the website to get feedback and advice. If you are not willing to learn, then prhaps you should take your arrogance away. Don't be so ...

Pippo! Don't quit, honestly, just because we ave a few questions is no reason to have a go at us!

Thanks Jabber! I'm so unsure about the horse, its too LotR. Unintenional by the way! Why did Tolkien have to steal all the good ideas lol “You will learn, [period ...

Calm down, we're trying to help you!

Thnaks very much! Aedomir is actually quite clever, he's just very confused because, well, we woke up 1000 years later than when he last remebered. And the horse thing, don't ...

lol! Thanks, I will get to chasing rainbows I really promise! Don't worry. Aedomir is the main character lol, I need to make him a bit more likeable :-D

Heya BBB! Don't you just hate writer's block? I've had one for about a week, I think I got rid of it now lol :-D Right, on to the crit! ...

Sorry, I tried to drag us back on topic several times... I know that it's a publicity thing. But it's still pretty fun to bash... Although, considering that I do ...

Thanks jabber! Its great for your commitment!

Lol, he's such a poser! How vain can you get?!

everyone said that her, and I agree. In fact, I got bored of him and stuck a chapter in between 1 and 2, its about Seridon. Its in my signature...

I liked this, it jsut didn't grip me. Carry on, just thing harder about repetitin, Its call, but almsot half the poem is 'I can't'. Keep writing! ~D'Aedomir~

lol no *cries* na I got a week off and im in all day today. im going every other day *yay!* ye thats ride of the rohhirm, its my faovurite ...

ye I hate that poem...