Aedomir

I lvoed the structure of this poem, its really great! I enjoyed this, and I think it was short, snappy, to the point and no faffing about! I liked the ...

Wow! 'I try so fucking hard sometimes That I forget that I’m alive.' Strangley fantastic! Catching and yet o fully of imagery, whcih is saying something really! I really loved ...

Like everyone else here, I loved this. The last stanza really did it for me. Such a pwerful ending, summing it all up and giving a total seal. It was ...

Hello there! :-) I'm Mark nice to meet you! This is very good, I thought it was really funny. Very intersting take on a fairy tale! You really modernised it ...

Hiya there! I don't know anything about poetry, but wondered if you'd like my thoughts: 'I’ve been waiting since 3:65 yesteryear to see you in my room, gnawing on an ...

Hiya! No one hs critiqued this yet? OK, lets see what we have here. You don't mind? Thought not! 'annika said aloud as if needed to convince herself.' Pick one ...

Hiya there! This is good, very very good! 'We shared crayons and blocks. We shared snacks and naps and secrets. We lived, laughed, and loved together. But, it's over now. ...

I don't know the first thing about poetry, but I liked this. I find the lines a very long, and perhaps you can seperate these out more, but I don't ...

Hey there! Let's see what we have shall we? 'some mythological creature had reportedly appeared to her' the 'to her' doesn't fit in or make sense, chop it off. 'The ...

Hiya! Let's take a look here shall we... OK then, first things first. Why the factfile? Writers say that by putting a factfile you can't be bothered to write all ...

Hey there! Long time no see :-D 'But sixty percent of time' I know it needs to fit a certain amount of sylablls, but if it doesn't fit, rewrite it. ...

I don't really know what this is, or what to take frm it in fact. It was intersting, but I am not sure what the intended point was. Yes, this ...

Hey there! Now, what do we have here? 'She was slain by her own toiletries.' I am not sure whether you were going for this, but I thought it was ...

I havebn't heard the lullaby, so I can't relate to it and at a bit of a loss. But after rading this, I can tell it was based from sort ...

Hiya! I feel a bit guilty, I haven't read any of your other stuff, but still, let's see what we have here. 'All his life he had been fenced in; ...