Adnamarine

I love poems about poetry, and I liked this very much:) "The Poet ' s hand quivers- With thoughts on edge of pen , The world upon their shoulders- And ...

Um, I don't have much to say about this. It was alright, though it wasn't terribly original. I think it could benefit from a bit more imagery, if you know ...

Hi Charlie, how's it going? I think... this was pretty good, but it could use a bit of work. First of all, you need to have a rhythm. Right now ...

Quite clever, and quite enjoyable:) Very lighthearted. "It's raining paper like snow today," We don't ordinarily say it's raining snow, do we? :)I'm not sure what would work the best ...

Welcome to YWS, first of all. Secondly, like OverEasy said, please do two reviews for each piece of your own you post. Now to your poem. Like Yatta said, it ...

Wow… just, wow! This is really, really great poetry. Longer poetry usually has a hard time holding me, but this was incredible. It was very unexpected and unique, very different.. ...

Summer storms are gorgeous:) I think you did a very good job of capturing some of that loveliness. The sky glowers. I like the words you used for your first ...

Honestly, I could not make head or tail of this. It sounded like a bunch of cobbled together words that happened to sound nice together. I couldn't understand what in ...

The topic of you poem is so cliche, so overdone, so stale that it's very difficult to make anything new and worthwhile out of it, and I'm afraid you didn't ...

The first thing I noticed is that all your sentences have the same type of structure, especially in the very beginning. It gives it a rather bland feel. "That was ...

Lightheartedly Evil and cynical. That describes the first perfectly. It reminds me of how my sister describes old people, her tottering hags and all that... I didn't really find it ...

I think whimsical is the word to describe this:) Or at least... the most prominent word. Other words that come to mind are excellent, lovely, and intriguing. "a winter wind ...

I think I know what you meant by it. I'm not sure though. I do know that what it means to me isn't what you meant. Have you ever had ...

Oh dear *giggles* Everything about this is so singularly odd. It's really quite delightful. It's so unique and silly and really, awfully good:) I don't really have any suggestions to ...

My first impression was that I think it could be improved if you made it longer. I think you could better develope the ideas you have here that way. It ...