AdjiFlex

Well this is a story I'll definitely read more of. Firstly, it isn't plagues with syntax confusion and grammatical errors, which goes a far way in making me continue to ...

Hello there. You reviewed my work not long ago. Naturally, I am here to return the favor. So let's start on a good note. I quite like the shady, shifty ...

Hello there. So this is a prologue you say. Hmm... Well, as a writer, the length of your chapters and prologues is all up to you; it makes up what ...

Hello there. I'm glad you are the type who embraces harsh criticisms that can make your work better. Such an attitude can certainly get you very far. So yes, as ...

I must say, this is one of the most well done pieces of this length I've ever read. There was no need to going to great descriptions of your protagonist, ...

Heya. Well finally some of the special powers of the Ryg race is being brought to light. I think this revelations, seeing its importance, shouldn't have been trivialized this much ...

There is a sad nostalgia and solemness in this poem that is communicated perfectly by these random, seemingly mundane memories. This is the essence of poetry. Indeed, the things that ...

This is certainly a wonderful chapter! This is a good teaser to sell your book, as now I want to know what leads up to this and what this leads ...

So they're FINALLY at this tower. I particularly like your first sentence- it's a pretty nice way to reinforce the mayor's... size, size being both literal and in terms of ...

Hello again. This chapter is pretty nice. It is much more descriptive than the previous ones, and I like that Ky is still practically as crucial to the story as ...

Brilliant perspective, first thing. Loved how you kinda used the pet's point of view to give a kind of third-person feel for a good amount of the chapter. We can ...

The chapter is really calm. I expected much more tension when Grandpa and Cynthia met up. So the grandfather agrees readily and is practically sending his granddaughter off to Radio ...

Greetings, Rainbow. Unlike mine, the length of your chapters aren't scary and discouraging, which will make it more likely that persons will actually give your work a chance and take ...

Aright, so I'mma say this. This is the best piece I've read since I've joined this site (and yes, I know I haven't read every piece). On to business, now. ...

Lose the asterisks. Hey there. Your story, as I believe a reviewer mentioned, has a nice feel to it- the tension is there and it feels realistic. With a few ...