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Re: Kerosene Kisses
AAHHHH!! I LOVED IT!! good job buddy! well i must say that at first it was hard for me to understand how it was suppose to flow, but after i ...
Feb 7, 2011 -
Re: Forgotten Hope
oh goodness!! I'm freaking out! i love these!!! they are just over all AMAZING! and i really like the line from the first one "for bitter mistakes are blessings in ...
Feb 4, 2011 -
Re: What I Am
wow good job honey. as everybody else stated the line breaks could use a little work, but other then that i think it was incredible. it made me feel sufficiently ...
Feb 4, 2011 -
Re: Three women and a blank page
i just wanted to say that i am really impressed by the fact that you were able to take such a long line: "staring into a dirty concrete wall, she ...
Feb 4, 2011 -
Re: Frigid Night
how could you!! i was feeling nice and warm and then you went and wrote this so now i'm feeling cold! haha! just kidding. but no really you did a ...
Dec 26, 2010 -
Re: Clouds of Chalk
well i like this. but i have to admit at first i thought this was about a little girl in elementary school. so you might want to clear up WHERE ...
Dec 26, 2010 -
Re: Mourning of a lost Civilization, Mourning of my Creations
i was a little confused by what you were going at here but i eventually figured it out. i like the mystical feeling and the mystery that you wrote into ...
Dec 26, 2010 -
Re: here i am
ok so over all these are goo lyrics. but! if you want this to be about a bad relationship you need to make it a bit more clear. cause i ...
Dec 26, 2010 -
Re: My friend Wacky.
this is so cute!! its written from the heart i can tell and that makes it all the better. there is just one line that i felt was a bit ...
Dec 26, 2010 -
Re: Blue Flames and Bloodshot Eyes (Chapter 3)
HEY! sorry it took me so freaking long to read this but here i am!! anyway. so i only noticed a few problems that i could help with. 1: i ...
Dec 23, 2010 -
Re: Towers
oooh wow very nice job here I liked it a lot. avery once in a while i owuld get a little confused about some bits but eventually i worked through ...
Oct 8, 2010 -
Re: long road to my heart
hello I'm gonna review for ya' today. Blue = great how it is Red = didn't make sense try re- writing a little Green = extra super-duper liked this Orange ...
Sep 7, 2010 -
Re: The New Begining
OOHH very nice i really like this you did a great job. haha funny tid bit of information it made me laugh when it said "it was Kyle" lol I'm ...
Sep 7, 2010 -
Re: Remember That Night?
I like this. it makes a person think . . . well it made me think . . . I really like the ending how you just kinda left that ...
Sep 7, 2010 -
Re: Winter Fireworks
oh my word, that is so heart warming and cute. i got such a happy safe feeling from this poem, it's so sweet. it flowed really well and was easy ...
Sep 4, 2010
